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Post by alanreut on Sept 10, 2006 21:08:35 GMT -5
Hi. New here. Nolan directed me here. My 1st Sample using someone else's script is finished. Script I followed is here: homepage.mac.com/dmcduffie/site/Demon_27_Script.html - I only did the 1st five pages. I don't think it's worth the ulcer I got doing it, but hey what is?      I apologize in advance. - Alan |
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Post by berlinpoe on Sept 13, 2006 15:00:47 GMT -5
You got alot of talent here!
You gonna ink these lean machine or are you after a penciler's gig?
Great anatomy, great angles. Great, great...
And who says I'm bitter and only say mean thingys...
...everyone.
But this, this is real good....how long you out of the gate in comic drawing...college any?
-BP
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Post by alanreut on Sept 14, 2006 18:06:01 GMT -5
some of my pages were renamed so I had to fix them...it should show 5 pages now.
thank you for the kind words.
Been drawing my whole life. No training.
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Post by berlinpoe on Sept 14, 2006 18:23:42 GMT -5
Well done.
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Post by finiteman on Apr 3, 2007 12:34:21 GMT -5
You have done a pretty good job. It is the fashion to do more in your face panels since Image came in, but I really like your inclination to back the camera up for the most part. I think it tends to be a better choice and makes it a ton more effective when you go in for the closeups. Additionally, your layouts leave plenty of room for word balloons to go in naturally. Bravo!
Negatives-
Really not too many. For the most part I knew pretty much what was going on from your art, you did your layouts with the dialogue in mind, AND you don't kill your jokes. That puts you ahead of 80-90% of all comic artists. Being able to parse a panel script and convey it properly is just good storytelling. You are a good storyteller.
I went back and read the script after looking at your art. In terms of layouts I think you nailed pages 1,2, and 5 and did a functional job on page 3. I think the only page your layouts struggled with the script was page 4. It clearly was the writer's "big gag" that he was saving for that issue. You really didn't nail it because you didn't realize that panel 3 was the most important panel on the page. You should have figured out the most important panel on the page, figured out how that should look for just the right playout, and THEN laid out the other panels. Looking at it, it seems like you probably drew panel 1 & 2 (and maybe 4 & 5) then realized panel 3's importance and tried to squeeze it in.
You would have done better with panels 1 &2 on the left half and a tall panel 3 with more of a close up on the right I think.
For a writer, nothing is more deflating than when an artist kills a joke, especially one that was years in the making like this one.
(For clarity's sake, you didn't kill it, but you didn't punch it either.)
Your characters all seem to have very long forearms and there is a general lack of fluidity to your work. Etrigan could have longer limbs --- be a little more gangly/demonic/deformed/hunched than you have drawn him --- at least in the scenes where he isn't campaigning. I might have Etrigan superimposed over the reflection of Jason Blood to where your artistic license in showing Etrigan as noticibly larger than Jason Blood is shown in the reflection scene.
I'd have loved to see a forked tongue somewhere. I mention this only because I am scraping the barrel for criticism of any sort. This really is fine work. If my artist handed this back, I'd be pretty content --- and I am a very harsh critic.
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