Mute Asylum Pages

[berlinpoe]

Okay so for the lazy here is the first two pages of Mute Asylum:





So I hope you enjoy it...

[berlinpoe]

So this page three...adressing this "differant" word bubble consern you all seem to have...

Hash is insane. The Boc isn't...but she's not all there, and the orderly is violent...you'll soon notice which people are violent crazy, crazy crazy, used to be crazy and sane, all by what font they speak in.

Yep.

So, I'm goona do it no matter what people think...Mute is for me, and I'm jsut sharing it. If I sell it I sell it, if I don't...hey, won't be the first time I havn't sold this idea...

-BP

[nolan]

Thanks for posting it here.

Um...the lettering can be a little hard to read at times. Could you keep the same effects from the schizophrenic letters while making them easier for people to read somehow?

I do like your art style though.

[berlinpoe]

I dunno, Nolan.

Ya'see I get both comments, hard to read, not-so hard to read...I'm not sure, not yet anyway, what to do. I like the Ugly face text and I COULD make it bigger, but that would reduce the amount of words...The next pages I'll play around with it a bit, see if'n I can't make it easier to read...

[nolan]

I don't mind the actual text. I just think there's a way you could keep the same aesthetic and make the pages more readable.

My friend who was just next to me looking at it (who doesn't read comics) said the same thing, just looking at the first panel.

I mean I lvoe the aesthetic that you'd going for but you have to keep the readability of the book too.

[berlinpoe]

I'm not trying to sell Mute.

This is for me, remember. I'm just being nice and sharing it.

And again, most people seem to be able to read it. So no need for a change.